"Greetings, I recently graduated from __________ School of Law in 2010 with a 3.09 grade point average. I am barred in Illinois and currently searching for an attorney position in the Chicago area. Attached is a copy of my resume. I heard of your lawyer placement and staffing company from a classmate who registered with your firm and I would like to schedule an interview at your earliest convenience. I have heard wonderful things about your services and look forward to hearing form you."
Whoa - reading the word barred on that type of email is like fingernails on a chalkboard. I replied to this person's email: Your resume looks great. But may I make a small suggestion? You’ve hit a nerve with me. I really think you (and some others) are misusing a the word “barred.” As in, “ I am barred in Illinois…” I can’t find any known definition of that word which equates to being the same in meaning being “licensed to practice law” in a state.
I totally understand what you mean, but barred mostly means "prevented from" or similar. In your use – it could even mean “barred from practicing law in Illinois,” which I know is not the case. I think this is East coast slang – but it’s you letter/email...
This is why it's worth a few bucks to have a professional editor review your stuff before you send it out. I can glance over a one-page letter and one-page resume in a few minutes (maybe $2 of my time) and tell you when something like this sets my teeth on edge.
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